President Obama emphasized the remarkable indifference and the passive behaviour of banks towards the (still present?) financial crises.
The banking industry on the other hand defended by saying ‘some fundamental changes have been made’. Banks plan to operate more balanced, using larger buffer zones and giving less leverage.
It will only be a matter of time to see if the banking sector makes true its promises and succeeds in creating a more confident appearance towards the public.
Bart De Clercq
1 opmerking:
S1: crisis (singular)
S2: defended itself
S3: in a more balanced way
S4: style: makes true its promises --> delivers on its promises
S4: wordy: succeeds in creating a more confident appearance towards the public: rewrite.
Clear single focus. Flow can increase through fewer wordy passages.
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