dinsdag 14 oktober 2008

Wishful Thinking.

The Flemish Government made a new law concerning help to the parents having children at school. This financial support is to help paying for school furniture and books to be bought. Till now this help has not been extended to University students yet. This would also be of great help for their parents and especially for those parents having more than one child at the University.

Magali Deloof
The VRT News from last week.

1 opmerking:

Steff zei

Fine - but could be clearer and more coherent. Title is not clear!
Details
'HAS made': it's currently relevant
--> 'to help parents who have children at school'
'This financial support': you haven't yet mentioned that it's about financial support
'help PAY'
not yet extended: it's a new law so it's too early for an extension to it. Why not: the new law does not apply to ...
university: no capital letter
This would be ...; better: "It would be...'
'those papents who have more ...'
university: no definite article